[phpBB Debug] PHP Notice: in file /includes/bbcode.php on line 483: preg_replace(): The /e modifier is no longer supported, use preg_replace_callback instead [phpBB Debug] PHP Notice: in file /includes/bbcode.php on line 483: preg_replace(): The /e modifier is no longer supported, use preg_replace_callback instead [phpBB Debug] PHP Notice: in file /includes/bbcode.php on line 483: preg_replace(): The /e modifier is no longer supported, use preg_replace_callback instead [phpBB Debug] PHP Notice: in file /includes/bbcode.php on line 483: preg_replace(): The /e modifier is no longer supported, use preg_replace_callback instead [phpBB Debug] PHP Notice: in file /includes/bbcode.php on line 483: preg_replace(): The /e modifier is no longer supported, use preg_replace_callback instead [phpBB Debug] PHP Notice: in file /includes/bbcode.php on line 483: preg_replace(): The /e modifier is no longer supported, use preg_replace_callback instead [phpBB Debug] PHP Notice: in file /includes/bbcode.php on line 483: preg_replace(): The /e modifier is no longer supported, use preg_replace_callback instead [phpBB Debug] PHP Notice: in file /includes/bbcode.php on line 483: preg_replace(): The /e modifier is no longer supported, use preg_replace_callback instead [phpBB Debug] PHP Notice: in file /includes/bbcode.php on line 483: preg_replace(): The /e modifier is no longer supported, use preg_replace_callback instead [phpBB Debug] PHP Notice: in file /includes/bbcode.php on line 483: preg_replace(): The /e modifier is no longer supported, use preg_replace_callback instead [phpBB Debug] PHP Notice: in file /includes/bbcode.php on line 483: preg_replace(): The /e modifier is no longer supported, use preg_replace_callback instead [phpBB Debug] PHP Notice: in file /includes/bbcode.php on line 483: preg_replace(): The /e modifier is no longer supported, use preg_replace_callback instead [phpBB Debug] PHP Notice: in file /includes/bbcode.php on line 483: preg_replace(): The /e modifier is no longer supported, use preg_replace_callback instead [phpBB Debug] PHP Notice: in file /includes/bbcode.php on line 483: preg_replace(): The /e modifier is no longer supported, use preg_replace_callback instead [phpBB Debug] PHP Notice: in file /includes/bbcode.php on line 483: preg_replace(): The /e modifier is no longer supported, use preg_replace_callback instead [phpBB Debug] PHP Notice: in file /includes/bbcode.php on line 483: preg_replace(): The /e modifier is no longer supported, use preg_replace_callback instead [phpBB Debug] PHP Notice: in file /includes/bbcode.php on line 483: preg_replace(): The /e modifier is no longer supported, use preg_replace_callback instead [phpBB Debug] PHP Notice: in file /includes/bbcode.php on line 483: preg_replace(): The /e modifier is no longer supported, use preg_replace_callback instead [phpBB Debug] PHP Notice: in file /includes/bbcode.php on line 483: preg_replace(): The /e modifier is no longer supported, use preg_replace_callback instead [phpBB Debug] PHP Notice: in file /includes/bbcode.php on line 483: preg_replace(): The /e modifier is no longer supported, use preg_replace_callback instead [phpBB Debug] PHP Notice: in file /includes/bbcode.php on line 483: preg_replace(): The /e modifier is no longer supported, use preg_replace_callback instead [phpBB Debug] PHP Notice: in file /includes/bbcode.php on line 483: preg_replace(): The /e modifier is no longer supported, use preg_replace_callback instead [phpBB Debug] PHP Notice: in file /includes/bbcode.php on line 483: preg_replace(): The /e modifier is no longer supported, use preg_replace_callback instead [phpBB Debug] PHP Notice: in file /includes/bbcode.php on line 483: preg_replace(): The /e modifier is no longer supported, use preg_replace_callback instead [phpBB Debug] PHP Notice: in file /includes/bbcode.php on line 483: preg_replace(): The /e modifier is no longer supported, use preg_replace_callback instead [phpBB Debug] PHP Notice: in file /includes/bbcode.php on line 483: preg_replace(): The /e modifier is no longer supported, use preg_replace_callback instead [phpBB Debug] PHP Notice: in file /includes/bbcode.php on line 112: preg_replace(): The /e modifier is no longer supported, use preg_replace_callback instead ¤ milky moon ¤ • View topic - Lyric's Release
I am the best damn lyricist anyones ever seen and i am in the process of releasing my lyrics publicy. I shall do so here day by day for you all to enjoy,they are intendid for joanna to sing well because nowone else can!.
my first i will be releasing is the astral gondolier,enjoy.
From my perspective, I think you overuse classical reference and archaic terms very heavily. I can see how you make the connection with Joanna but when she uses these things it's always with a very specific purpose, but I feel with your lyrics it really takes away from understandability and sense, it kinda gives the impression that you are trying to seem very clever and veiling the real point of your lyrics.
It's also very hard to take someone who's first line is 'I am the best damn lyricist ever' seriously at all.
im glad you noticed the archaic useage,i for one am proud of it,i sought to rescue deceased and forgotten words from the corners of the dictionary and bring them back into the modern age fresh and resplendant. i dont think it takes away from the core principles of my lyrics,but if you think so thats an opinion i can live with. just ignore my hubris im full of it,dont let the percpetion of anothers hubris get in the way of any judgement.
now for my next one...arymilla(which means a pastoral poetess)
You should really try something besides iambic tetrameter and try avoiding the whole last-word-of-every-single-line-rhymes thing. I'm really convinced that this is some big hoax/joke.
Beyond the groves and the cloves of a distant glade lies a place where spirits race and sirens serenade pristine its slept so few have crept unto its verdant shade for no mans walked its roots and stalks ,such missives are forbade,
Its songbirds drawl and orchids whorl in their drunk parade so many hues for one to muse ,resplendently arrayed and on the grass blossoms mass its iridescent shade that chance to bloom but thrice a moon of a half decade.
It was august with wanderlust ,when to its bounds I strayed for i heard a voice of sweet rejoice a man could not evade it called me to,thro and though and I in lust obeyed theres not a mind of human kind she could not persuade.
A season cowed, the leaves un-boughed , blossom did nightshade sprig and branches swang to dances with the winds tirade the sap in sinter as the winters lorelei sashayed crowned in laurels canting chorals belagost en-laid,
And as I slept upon me swept grey hair in sylvan braid and a spectral touch I begged so much,of the astral maid she held my face in her embrace and said” be not afraid” I am yours you are my cause until the heavens fade,
In a chasm of phantasm upon the moss we laid where shed weave upon the eve ancestral serenades unfurled her gowns a thousand crowns have weaved with gold brocade beneath delight,the rarest sight all eyes had yet surveyed,
With lips of nectar, tongue of spectre of the past she layed, planes beyond the mortal bond whence once she bloomed and played twice a sprite deft of flight, thrice a young mermaid and a poltergeist who roamed our east as a dainty shade.
Ever gently an aeon twenty here she has leyed now I abide beside that side of raiments jet and jade from the banquet to the blanket sleight my soul is weighed not a stride of my bride have mine eyes betrayed,
I am a treasure at her pleasure my form she has remade my wounds are dressed my skin is blessed all age has been allayed but there was a cost for Belagost and high a price I paid my footfalls baulk should I walk beyond our hidden slade,
so ive smiled the years where she stirs,betrothed to each weve stayed our love it wages through the ages of a mistral glade, some may veer and catch our ear or glimpse her masquerade yet never can another man hear the singing maid Belagost,Belogost my grace the singing shade.
I have a hunch that it's Aegilicous what's-his-name from that MEM review trying to "prove a point" that anyone can use old words and sound smart... point NOT made.
Gossamer glistens,the lilly the lichen a gosling orphans agraze, an albatross brushes and bristles the rushes a gander beside forays, the life that I render,all that I raize the times that I tender,the dead that I raise, to love you I gave them all emotion, for just you my girl can amaze this beholders boundless gaze for you,I set all time in motion.
Columbine blushes and flock do the thrushes arace with an eddies sashays, for Boreas he rushes the air as he gushes the barley the wheat and the maize, and of all that he tilts,that which he sways all that he lilts,they all stand agaze, you are, there every thought and notion. of all the stars still ablaze just you and yours can I praise you are,you are our one devotion
lapping gulls,in sullen lulls soar your ocean sprays, on shingle, shell and swilling swell theyve spent a thousand days, theyl sift the shale and drift a vale ashroud with twilight haze and there youl drift on sands ashift with grace that does amaze, in the west youl see in crest the moon in quarter phase, and on the breast of Everest she will shed her ways, her mask and casque and you shall bask immortal in our rays.
For all afar be world or star to you's in locomotion, for in their hearts you did start the godliest commotion, every mind that ever gazed, I have called and ive raised, to hale, upon your shining ocean
You know my girl ile sing your praise until there are no stars ablaze for you, I set all time in motion, you are,you are my one devotion to love you, I gave all life emotion I made it all for you!.
My lords it has been said you've had a hand wherever weve tread throughout all the pages through ages in dread you were the ones better off dead
Boys, boys, boys in the red they've had you baited blind and mislead whatever you've battled,wherever you've bled they used your blood to butter their bread
Sons sons so long we've sped blushing the waters wherever we've fled but best you remember those colours youve shed for boys theirs a shadow coming ahead
why why why are you lead harken not the lies they have bred they havnt a heart, not even a shred they take the gold as you do the lead
is it the barrel,the camouflage spread aluminium canteens , the fables youve read they keep you warm, they keep you fed but they bear the mark upon their forehead
so boys boys boys of the red when you are weary lonely in bed remember the one to whom you are wed don't give them your blood, don't give them your head